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Motions

Going though the motions
With no understanding
It was a cracked family
That refused to just break
Filling our ears with criticism and hate
It meant nothing to us and was all shut away
Salt from her tears and stars from her smile
One meets their best friend when needed the most
Mermaid of the ocean
Ballerina of a diver
But the high dive was nothing
Her balcony was higher
Her Ribs badly broken
One lung all collapsed
By the time I got her letter
That she hoped would be her last
Life continued on as they said it would
Their words droned on still
Still no hope of change
Pain continued in a different way
A notch for everything we couldn't have
The moon seemed so far away
It takes self-discipline to starve yourself
When control can't be found any place
Courage to step in front of a truck
And back before it is too late
Not that brave
Not that scared
When there was no hope left
When they finally stopped preaching
Only then did she stop
©2003-2009 ~broken-ren
:iconbroken-ren:

Author's Comments

I have a really hard time writing poetry usually
This one took me forever to do and it was also for school.

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:iconsullenmood:
not bad for someone who claims to have a hard time with it....wondering though? by hard time, did you mean sharing your emotions or just putting the words together?? either way, I liked the flow....just my opinions here, but the part "It meant nothing to us and was all shut away" I would ditch 'all' but that's me huh?? good werk :)
:iconfrozensyne:
rein's poems are always good :D

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